Approaching an Unseen Poem (English Literature)

Approaching an Unseen Poem (English Literature)


APPROACHING AN UNSEEN POEM Welcome back. So now we’re going to be looking
at some stock phrases we can use within our unseen poem. Hopefully we already know that
what we’re going to be doing is picking out SMILE points and I’m going to be using
the SMILE points there in just a second to demonstrate something to you. So basically we’re writing a short essay,
it doesn’t have to be very long. And what we’re going to be looking at using SMILE,
we’re going to be using SMILE along with the acronym PEAL. This isn’t new to you,
PEA or PE and then here I’ve just got the idea of linking it to something else, that’s
what the ‘L’ stands for this in this – link it to something else. So, with our points, some of the things we
can actually say. First of all we need to know, sorry, that actually all we’re going
to do with our opening is we’re going to re-structure the question. So the question
from the previous paper June 11. ‘How do you think the speaker feels about the child
and experience of learning to read and how does the poet present the speakers feelings?’ OK, so here we’re being asked about the
meaning and the ideas. And here, we’re being asked to look at language, images and structure,
OK? So know that that’s the case. That’s why I said meaning’s the most important.
The first part of the question’s going to be dealing with that and the second part is
going to be dealing with the way. OK, so to highlight our points first of all,
we say ‘the speaker feels the child is’ and then try and mention two or three things.
And I’m going to do one with an example of a poem I’ve actually read afterwards
‘and that his learning experience is’ and then we’re going to mention that because
that’s going to answer the first part of our question and give us some things to talk
about as we go through. After that we’re going to start our essay proper. So we get a sense of… and then you can mention
one of these and then back it up with a quote and then use ‘this indicates’, ‘it gives
us a feeling of’, ‘this develops’, ‘this makes us consider’, etc. etc. So for the ‘P’ you can build yourself
up a bank of these, so I’ve got one, two, three, four, five here, but that would be
enough obviously for five point. And the reason I’ve picked five is because if you write
five well-built points then you definitely have enough for an essay – more than enough
actually for an essay – but anyway, the points are actually there. Then the evidence
you’d obviously pick out yourself but just make sure it’s something short and relevant.
So don’t pick out say, if we look at the poem here, don’t pick out like, you know
a huge chunk like that for example, you just want to pick out something pithy. So it’s
kind of like there maybe, and even if you’re going to use something like this, you might
just want to put ‘who knows’ and then put the ellipsis…, sorry three full stops
in a row, to gather the rest because you don’t want to waste time copying out large quotations
from the poem. So then we move onto the analysis, and I should
actually put this here so you can make sure that’s a relevant point – Evidence – Analysis
– and then Link to, and the Link to there could be Structure – Language or Image,
OK? So we’re talking about analysis. ‘This
indicates’, ‘this gives a feeling of’, ‘this develops’, ‘this makes us consider’,
‘this concentrates our affections on’, ‘this makes the reader feel’, any of those
things but there’s just some stock ones just to help build you up, you know if you
haven’t got a bank already for them. And then with our linking piece, after you’ve
made that PEE point, you link, ‘this is aided by’ and then you’re going to link
to structure. ‘This is furthered by’, linked to the images for example. ‘Emphasis
is added through’ use of language, ‘this is a point by’ blah, blah, blah. So it’s
very simple. It is PEAL. So we’ll actually have a look at this, we’ll try and put,
not a real essay together, but just kind of show this in practice. So I’m going to imagine, here’s my note
just because they were the ones most recent in my history. Here’s the ones for the poem
‘Yellow Palm’. So we’re going to imagine it was an unseen poem and I’ve kind of read
through it and these are the kind of things that I’ve actually picked out. So, I’m
going to change my question – ‘how do you think the speaker feels about the child
and the experience of learning?’ ‘So how do you feel the poet feels about conflict?’
‘How do you think the poet feels about conflict and his experience travelling and how does
the poet represent, how does the poet present these feelings?’ So now I’ve got a new question, OK? ‘How do you think the poet feels about this
conflict and his experience travelling and how does the poet present these feelings?’
So I’ve got a brand new question and I’m going to actually answer it with these. So I need to write my points, my evidence,
my explanation. So the first point I’m going to write is ‘the writer gets the sense of
the…’ just so you can see I’ve got the points here. So I’ve got ‘the writer got
a sense of decay.’ ‘He gets a sense of Baghdad’s future’. ‘He gets a sense
of the issues facing the people’. And they’re all themes, topics, ideas picked up from the
poem. So you can see this and then the learning experience – because we’ve got the effect
on the reader down here – is the effects of war; so we’ve got that as well. Oh, sorry
I should change this…’and that his travelling has shown him’ and I can put that in there.
So all of this is just going to be, it just becomes a ‘fill the box’ exercise. So
things about people that you don’t normally see. So there’s my kind of opening introduction,
just kind of banking on that. OK straight away. Now the point, we get a sense of the again,
because I’m just going to be referencing these things here, so I’m going to be getting
a sense of the state of Baghdad. We get a sense of – I’m going to need to move these
along to actually bring it back down – so we get a sense of the state of Baghdad and
then I need a quotation there. I haven’t got the poem next to me, so I’m just going
to put like imagine I had some evidence and I’m going to say ‘this comes through the
reference of’, this is through the image of the blood and the walls still tarnished.’
OK? So here’s part of the image, part of my evidence and in my analysis I’m going
to say ‘this indicates’ and then there I just go with whatever I want, ‘the danger
that people have suffered and the constant’ – always good to mention two things when
you’re actually doing it – ‘and the constant reminders they have of the war’. OK, so now I want to link this. So I’m going
to take this, ‘this is furthered by’, because remember my comment is still talking
about Baghdad’s future, sorry, we get a sense of the state of Baghdad, so the walls
in the sanctuary’s my evidence and this gives an idea of the danger and I’m going
to pick, ‘so this is furthered by’ and I’m going to lift that and put it up here.
‘This is furthered by’ and I can actually have, here we go, so, there we go, I’m going
to be looking at language. ‘This is furthered by the writer’s constant use of war like
language’ and obviously then again, I’m going to back that up with more evidence. Alright? So that very simple but very relevant
explanation – if I had the right evidence it would make sense – and we’ll look at
that because we’re going to look at some A* material in a second. So here with my point,
I opened up with the point that I actually wanted to open up with and I’ve got my things
from PEE, from here and here, and then I can put ‘this indicates’ because that was
again, something that I actually wanted to build with when I’m actually making my analysis
and then I actually discussed that and then I actually made my first link. OK? By adding
this again. Now you see that all you have to do to link
it and make your essay even more complex, is to add it even further. So here I’ve
got that link, so I’ve said that one, I’m going to pick this one as well. Because the
more I link it, the more I develop my point, obviously the more perceptive it is and that’s
ultimately what I want to be. So emphasis is added through the rhyme. OK?
Feels like it should be about something cheery but it isn’t, so it’s the ironic rhyme
scheme that actually emphasises that. And obviously all I would do is just mould these
slightly. ‘Emphasis to the sadness of the city is added through’. And there you see
all I’ve done is I’ve taken my stock points that I’ve told you and that one I’ve actually
added. Now for each one I wouldn’t actually go
for more than two, so that there is – obviously it’s not written properly, I haven’t got
my quotations in it – but that there is 65 words. With my quotations and written properly
it should be about 100 words. So that really is going to be about one third of your page.
So if you make three or four points like that, then you’re laughing and that’s why we
pick out three things and we mention three things here so we’ve got a lot of things
to actually play with. Remember, all you’re trying to do is hit
the criteria and the criteria would be: to be perceptive, to talk pick up things and
explore them; so this definitely explores the idea by talking about more than one thing
and it actually references structure and it references the language, because obviously
we picked that up from the point we made earlier and so that’s how you kind of build the
point. Now this is obviously relevant to the section
A as well, but I think section B is where more people are going to struggle, that’s
why I’ve kind of gone through this in a very laboured way just to kind of show it. So I’m going to undo all that I’ve actually
typed here and then put this up just so you’ve got those stock phrases and if you go in with
six or seven, then hopefully you’ll be fine. So remember, in answering it, you read the
poem, then pick up SMILE points for it – between 9 and 15 – and then just start structuring
it with these kind of stock answers or stock phrases that you have, just to start building
it. And remember you’re going for using SMILE to build strong PEAL points. Your Point,
your Evidence, your Analysis and then your Link to more supporting points from SMILE. I hope that makes sense.
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14 thoughts on “Approaching an Unseen Poem (English Literature)

  1. i have to be honest, you are the best teacher i know. I'm good at most subjects but my english is appalling and you are my savior. i want to thank you for these amazing videos 🙂

  2. In my school we use PEELA,
    Point Evidence Explanation Language analysis Alternative views. its also a pretty good system to use maybe you could try it out?

  3. this video helped me get an A* for my GCSE Poetry exam … this was the part that I struggled on most and now I get it
    THANK YOU SOO MUCH
    recommend this to anyone who wants to get A/A*

  4. going to try to use p-e-a-l tomorrow in the literature exam.. fingers crossed all goes to plan and i dont mess up! 

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